Re: first draft of solstice message

[Robert <http://dummy.us.eu.org/robert>]

Thanks.

Below are my changes.

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@@ -33,10 +33,11 @@
       lot of feet dragging about the entire process, but, after some
       brainstorming sessions, finally came up with a rough outline,
       including some amusing stories.  Using a shared Google doc, I
-      filled out portions, as did my mom and siblings.  As it evolved,
-      however, there were some disputes over the wording.  A small war
-      of attrition ensued and words were exchanged.  A détente
-      was reached and the obituary finally published.  See it here
+      filled out portions, as did Noelle, my mom, and siblings.  As it
+      evolved, however, there were some disputes over the wording.  A
+      small war of attrition ensued and words were exchanged.  A
+      détente was reached and the obituary finally published.
+      See it here
       https://web.archive.org/web/20220523083900/https://www.news.com/obituaries/tnm063074
     * Jet airliner?  Or, jet plane?  We drove up to the San Francisco
       airport to meet up with Noelle's stepmom and dad there for a
@@ -73,7 +65,7 @@
         a pharmacy in East where-I-live.  We live in central where-I-live and,
         after jumping in the car and driving there, discovered this
         very long line just to check in.  The pharmacy was very
-        short-staffed and the few pharmacists there were running
+        short-staffed and the one lone pharmacist there was running
         around.  As it passed 10pm, while I held my spot in line,
         Noelle ran around and found that the line for vaccinations
         were separate and shorter, but there was still a wait time.
@@ -191,7 +173,7 @@
       could stay where we could visit friends and relatives or
       vice-versa.  This alone would've involved many logistical
       challenges, quite aside from the overall costs.  Second, since
-      the pandemic befell upon us, airlines severely reduced their
+      the pandemic befell us, airlines severely reduced their
       number of flights.  Getting there from where-I-live just would not
       be as convenient as it has in the past.  Besides any such
       vacation being far from relaxing, we eventually scrapped plans